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Post by schafferius on Feb 28, 2006 0:04:11 GMT -5
Haha....Might be a good idea. I reckon we could make a kick arse story. I was born in 1982 and Im a leo. What about yourself?
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Disasterfreak
Lilly's Bedroom
I'm not her Ho [/b][/color]err.. Rerun Retard Ho [/b][/color]
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Post by Disasterfreak on Mar 27, 2006 21:08:38 GMT -5
I was born in 1978 > I'm an old far_. Hey! After fighting for 48 hours and wringing ff.net's neck, it finally let me upload my new chap, and here it is: www.fanfiction.net/s/2349893/20/
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Post by soccerulz on Mar 27, 2006 22:25:29 GMT -5
DF!
I tried to leave a review at ff.net, but it wouldn't let me. GAH! f-ing website.
Anyway - *cough* on to the review
*jaw drops*
WOW DF. That chapter was just......I'm like speechless. I don't even know what to say. It was so amazing. I loved the plot of the chapter, I loved how you handled each of the characters. Especially Lilly towards the end. Amazing.
I'm SO glad ff.net let you update. This chapter was undeniably amazing.
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Post by TVFan on Mar 28, 2006 11:28:18 GMT -5
It's not showing up DF! I tried going straight to FF.net too, but it only shows through chapter 18, the one with Chris. I'll keep tyring, though, because I'm dying to read your chapter.
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Post by sonny on Mar 28, 2006 11:30:54 GMT -5
DF, I'll agree with everything Soccer said!
Great chapter and was totally not expecting Lilly's attacker to be so relentless; he just kept going at her!
looking forward to seeing what the guys do about it and in particular Scotty considering their relationship is in total meltdown at the moment.
I still haven't managed to read the whole fic yet, but have 2 weeks off from Friday so will get round to it then. Then I will do a review for you at ffic.net.
Do you think you'll update sooner this time? This is on the edge of your seat stuff!! :smile41:
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Disasterfreak
Lilly's Bedroom
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Post by Disasterfreak on Mar 28, 2006 21:29:03 GMT -5
Thanks for the reviews, you guys!!! You're the best. This chapter wasn't easy to write, it had to be done just right (according to my idea of it) or not at all, and since I had it in mind from the beginning, I couldn't bear to leave it out. Believe it or not, it wasn't easy making my Lilly suffer .
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Post by sukkerspinn on Mar 29, 2006 1:19:12 GMT -5
*Rubs eyes* I think I actually had a dream about that chapter last night! Not directly, but directly enough to me. I've said it many places, but IMO this can't be praised enough so I'll go ahead and say it here as well. AWESOME chapter! It really shows that you planned it down to the detail, and I love the way you describe stuff. It's sad to think that it's almost over. Your fic is one of the few I've read that keeps everyone in-character every step of the way. Even with that Scotty and *shrudder* Chris...
When it comes to the entire Lilly-incident, I still haven't forgiven you for tearing THE coat! That one was a real pain in my heart to read. It was worse to read than all the other stuff. I can't believe she had to go through all that, and I'm really anxious to know where you'll take it from here! In other words; MORE! SOON!
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Post by schafferius on Mar 29, 2006 6:19:54 GMT -5
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Hey DF!!!!
Great Chapter!!! Took me a little while to see that you had written another one. Was so excited to see that it was over 3000 words too.....I was like Yipee!!! The chapter was excellent. It was very vivid. Almost like you were flying over the top watching -----> I know where u are coming from sukker......Good to see Lilly kicked some hardcore psycho's arse!!!! Like I have said twice previously ----> Excellent bloody chapter....Can't wait for the next one :smile87:
Oh yeah and thanks heaps for the dedication to me ----> almost missed it, but it is very sweet :smile84:
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Disasterfreak
Lilly's Bedroom
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Post by Disasterfreak on Mar 29, 2006 6:29:25 GMT -5
Hehe, I had to do it because of the storyline similarities ;D . Felt it was the only way it didn't seem so bad. But I did mean it in the kindest possible way. ;D
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Post by TVFan on Mar 29, 2006 16:44:50 GMT -5
I was finally able to load your latest chapter DF! I'm so glad it finally appeared. It was fantastic! I just loved the way you described the attack scene in the parking lot. It reminded me of that showdown scene in the Pilot between Lilly and Todd Whitley. The way you described all of Lilly's childhood fears resurfacing from the similar attack broke my heart a little. Then my heart totally broke when her 10 year old self spoke out to her to keep fighting. Excellently done! And Oh My God! You killed the coat!
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Disasterfreak
Lilly's Bedroom
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Post by Disasterfreak on Apr 22, 2006 1:44:03 GMT -5
Thanks, TVFan! I always enjoy reading your reviews because I know you know what you're talking about. Thanks so much everyone, for your continued support. My fanfic project is nearly over... www.fanfiction.net/s/2349893/21/
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Post by Rhi on Apr 22, 2006 2:24:33 GMT -5
just read your new chapter DF, its fantastic..just as i expected
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Post by marcovalenslassing on Apr 24, 2006 7:11:11 GMT -5
Awesome chapter as usual, Disasterfreak!
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Post by TVFan on Apr 25, 2006 11:16:36 GMT -5
I loved the way you eerily described Stillman's emotions and thought process as he equated Lilly's attack to Janie's years earlier. I just love the idea of Stillman as a father figure for Lil, so this internal monologue was perfect! I also enjoyed hearing Lilly's thoughts after the attack. You managed to make her strong, yet vulnerable without taking her out of character. As we all know from the real show, Lilly is not as strong as she wants everyone to think. She has her moments where she feels vulnerable, and I think she chastises herself after just as you had her doing in this scene. LOVED the counting teeth thing. It's such a small detail, but it really adds to the moment. It's a relatable aside, and totally like something we do when we feel uneasy. Scotty's guilt was a surprise, but I like it. He deserves to feel guilty after everything he has put Lil through. He's the reason that they don't have the close friendship they should have. Just as we saw recently in Sanctuary, he wants to make things right between him and Lil, but he's not exactly sure how. Nice character specific detailing! The interrogation is awesome! It's exactly how it would go on the show. You nailed so many emotions in that scene. I LOVED the moment when Vera felt like he had gotten Feldman because the attack is what led them to him as a suspect. Those three ending words aren't sounding too promising, though. I can't wait to read more! BTW: Thanks for the compliment, but I assure that I don't "know what I'm talking about." I just let you know what I liked.
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Disasterfreak
Lilly's Bedroom
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Post by Disasterfreak on Jun 25, 2006 18:37:05 GMT -5
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Post by TVFan on Jun 26, 2006 14:04:02 GMT -5
You write such engrossing, realistic, true-to-the-show interrogation scenes, DF. Seriously, I always forget I'm reading your story and start to go right to the show because they're that good! I loved the interesting twist at the end about Mrs. Feldman being pregnant. You've gotta love the irony! I also loved Lil's scenes in bed as she reflected on the recent happenings surrounding the aftermath of her attack. It's so Lil-like for her to grin and bare it just so she doesn't have to play the victim. Awesome chapter! I can't wait for more.
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Disasterfreak
Lilly's Bedroom
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Post by Disasterfreak on Jun 26, 2006 14:41:28 GMT -5
Thanks, TV. You're too kind! To tell you the truth, I thought this chapter was sadly lacking. It was hard to write, I sort of lost grasp of the characters sometime near the end of Season 3, and since my characters are still Season 2, I got sort of lost. Still... think I can find my way now. Thanks for bearing (patiently) with the long wait. ;D And for your awesome reviews.
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Post by sukkerspinn on Jul 13, 2006 18:35:29 GMT -5
Another ACE chapter, Duster! I ditto everything that's been said here now and before. I really feel in the middle of the action and like I'm watching an actual episode. And now I feel even more sorry for poor Lil...
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Lilly's Bedroom
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Post by Disasterfreak on Aug 27, 2006 14:04:05 GMT -5
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Post by samanda on Aug 27, 2006 16:35:27 GMT -5
Awesome chapter, DF! I loved Lilly's interrogation!
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