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Post by Shorty on Jul 23, 2005 22:32:31 GMT -5
ok, this idea wouldnt leave me alone- they're like that www.fanfiction.net/s/2486989/1/please tell me what you think and if there are any spelling errors or punctuation, please tell me |
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Disasterfreak
Lilly's Bedroom 
I'm not her Ho [/b][/color]err.. Rerun Retard Ho [/b][/color]
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Post by Disasterfreak on Jul 23, 2005 22:39:04 GMT -5
Dear Shorty, I think I've already been grilling you enough :smile65: , so I won't bug you anymore (I'm Joutsensydn, btw). I really like your plot, the story's exciting and the mystery's building up nicely. You're not giving up Kidnapped, though, are you? :smile28:
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Post by Shorty on Jul 23, 2005 23:03:49 GMT -5
are you?, no please, continue grilling me, i agree, my spelling + punctuation needs work, glad you like it ;D
no im definately not abandoning Kidnapped, im taking a short break, ill add more next sunday, i promise
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Post by TVFan on Jul 25, 2005 10:54:59 GMT -5
I think this one is off to a great start shorty! I'm looking forward to reading more. Bad Scotty for reading Lil's file!  |
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Post by Shorty on Jul 28, 2005 2:18:09 GMT -5
thank you!!! im glad you guys like it- it means alot for people to read and coment on my storys, chapter 3 is up, containing more dark revelations at least.... i just added it, might take a while for it to come up though *big hug* to Disasterfreak, thank you for reveiwing and pointing out spelling and punctuation errors  ;D, SOMEONE needs to and it wont be my english teacher  |
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Post by TVFan on Jul 28, 2005 10:11:27 GMT -5
The plot thickens. These parents were horrible - very dark characters, and certainly not likable victims, but victims all the same. I'm looking forward to your next chapter!  |
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Disasterfreak
Lilly's Bedroom
I'm not her Ho [/b][/color]err.. Rerun Retard Ho [/b][/color]
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Post by Disasterfreak on Jul 28, 2005 20:00:55 GMT -5
Shorty--I won't be able to read it till tomorrow but I promise to leave a big review then. *Big hug*
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Post by stlcardinalfan on Jul 29, 2005 17:12:48 GMT -5
Shorty, I really like this story. The victims were horrible people. I'm ready for the next chapter!!!!
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Post by Shorty on Aug 13, 2005 20:14:49 GMT -5
www.fanfiction.net/secure/live_preview.php?storyid=2486989&chapter=5/chapter 5 (chapter 6 is going to take a bit longer- i had already started chapter 5 when i posted chapter 1 and ive fallen behind) sore back, headache and dizzyness, i dont feel so good  probably something to do with my going to sleep at like, 1130-something and getting up at 0600 - i dont reccomend it. plus, everything on all the sites except source #1 has gone big and bold (the print) and its really getting on my nerves
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Post by TVFan on Aug 15, 2005 15:41:06 GMT -5
I can't wait to find out if Scotty reads the file or not. I like the way you have him so tormented over reading it. He's definitely struggling with what he knows is right and what he wants to do.
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;D, SOMEONE needs to and it wont be my english teacher 
probably something to do with my going to sleep at like, 1130-something and getting up at 0600 