|
|
Post by lillyandscotty on Sept 30, 2009 14:53:39 GMT -5
Thanks to Longislanditalian2 for helping me
Rated PG-13
Lilly and Scotty just had gotten Married, and were now coming home from being on their honeymoon. Of course everything was still the same at work but at home they were having their typical marriage problems.
One night after work, Lilly felt good to come home. On her mind, she thought of their trip to the Bahamas. It was so much fun, which Lilly had loved; but then she was falling asleep when Scotty came home.
Moving closer, Scotty then stroked his wife's hair, as she then proceeded to rolled over at put her head into his arm. Nonethless he then rested his head on hers for a while, before falling asleep, with his hand on her shoulder.
When Lilly woke up, she then carefully pulled away; before going downstairs to make some breakfast for them both. Suddenly, she felt a kiss on her cheek, turning slightly she then kissed Scotty, before finding some instant pancake batter, as she then started to make some.
" Did you sleep well Lil?", he asked while pouring himself a cup of coffee.
Lilly yawned slightly, " Yeah kept on thinking about our honeymoon, how wonderful it was."
He nodded softly," Tommorrow we're back at work, so I was thinking," as Scotty handed her some tickets, " That you and I go to an Eagles game."
She shook her head, before burning the pancakes once again. Lilly was no cook, yet either was Scotty ;whom couldn't even fry up an egg, " Have too much to do, laundry and I have to go to the cleaners to get my dress preserved."
" Can't you just relax for one day Lil?"
Lilly then rolled her eyes, knowing that it was going to be one long day ahead
|
|
|
|
Post by longislanditalian2 on Sept 30, 2009 14:58:54 GMT -5
just one thing, you spelled my name wrong, that's alright.. You ideas are great, if you need anymore help you can always ask me.
|
|
|
|
Post by lillyandscotty on Sept 30, 2009 15:07:56 GMT -5
She looked at him and sighed
"Maybe. you know what would help a lot? unpacking those last three boxes of yours, throwing out the rest, and cleaning the dishes while I'm gone" Lilly said
"Fine," Scotty said "but when you get back, we are going" He added, putting his arms around her.
Lilly kissed him once then looked at him
"fine fine, now get out of here so I can try to make these pancakes eatable."
Lilly said
Scotty laughed and walked out. Lilly continued frying until the pancakes were finally done
to be continued
|
|
|
|
Post by longislanditalian2 on Sept 30, 2009 15:38:34 GMT -5
( this isn't a put down or anything, just a suggestion to help you write better), this chapter could use some improvement, grammer wise that I can help you with; if you want me to. You need to make this chapter a big longer, why do just stop in the middle of the story? Again this is just me just trying to help you, you've got great ideas..
|
|
|
|
Post by lillyandscotty on Oct 2, 2009 18:44:03 GMT -5
Lilly got home from her errands. As she unlocked the door, she thought of what she had to do in her mind
Clean house
order lunch
hopefully go to the game with Scotty
She walked in and saw the house clean, Pizza on the table with Scotty at the table. She smiled, and crossed of the things in her mind
Clean house
order lunch
Go to game with Scotty
"I ordered lunch, and cleaned everything" Scotty said
"Did you do this so I could go to the game?" Lilly asked
"No... Well, yeah" He said, and pulled out two plates
Lilly rolled her eyes and sat down
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Lilly sighed. Crowds, she could deal. Yelling and cheering, who cares? Loudness, so what. awful concession food, at least it wasn't burnt. But Loud cheering, yelling crowds in a stadium with awful concession food was way to much for her.
But, she stayed there for Scotty. At least until someone accidentally spilled their ice tea on her. Annoyed, she got out of her seat and stormed off.
"Lil?" Scotty called, following her
He finally caught up, and swirled her around. Her shirt was soaked, and the ice tea managed to splash her face. Luckily, she didn't wear makeup.
"Lilly, are you okay?" Scotty asked
"Yeah, but were leaving." Lilly yelled
"What? there's like, twenty more minutes!" He exclaimed
"If your not coming with me, you're are walking home!" She yelled, angry
"Fine!"
"Fine!"
Lilly stormed out, and Scotty walked back to the seats. She walked over and unlocked the car, and drove off. About halfway home, it started to rain.
To be continued...
|
|
|
|
Post by longislanditalian2 on Oct 2, 2009 19:08:30 GMT -5
Much better, just need a tad bit more work with puncuation ( this isn't putting your story down or anything. I'm just trying to help you out a bit) but otherwise, this story is a great improvement; keep it up
|
|
|
|
Post by lillyscotty on Oct 3, 2009 0:15:17 GMT -5
Ahh, I love the way Lilly gets so angry, its great!
|
|
|
|
Post by lillyandscotty on Oct 3, 2009 7:06:24 GMT -5
While driving back home, Lilly was angry but yet she wasn't angry at Scotty. It wasn't his fault that someone had spilled iced tea all over her, yet she herself had been moody all day. Either way, Lilly wasn't about to let this one go, anytime soon.
Still she continued driving through the pouring rain, until her car had managed to break down. Being that Scotty practically knew everything about cars, she knew who the to call; except that he was still at the game.
Lilly then got out, but on the way to find a nearest convenience store; she had tripped and broke her right leg. That wasn't the only problem, it was also her marriage.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
She sat in the chair, waiting for x rays. The door to the doctors room opened slowly, and Scotty looked in; Lilly looked at him, soaking wet and dripping. Because of the small TV in the doctors room, she knew the game had about fifteen minutes left, and yet, here he was.
"Lil, are you okay?" Scotty asked, walking in
"She's fine, it's a minor breakage; you just need a cast for about two weeks" The doctor said, brushing past Scotty
"Two weeks? but I go back to work tomorrow!" Lilly said
"I'm pretty sure boss will let you stay. Just, don't add pressure to your foot." Scotty said
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Lilly and Scotty got home, via cab. Lilly gently sat on the couch; Scotty sat down, moving her crutches between them. Not to be mean, but Lilly was still annoyed at him; he could tell.
"Scotty, whats going on? I snapped at you for something that wasn't your fault" Lilly said
"I don't know Lil, maybe newlywed fights." He answered, shrugging
"Yeah, but I fell like were fighting more then we would if we weren't married," Lilly began, not really noticing Scotty moving next to her "And I don't-" Lilly said, before being interrupted by Scotty
"Kiss me" he said
"What?"
"Just do it"
They kissed, and as soon as they broke apart, they kissed again;and again;and again
|
|
|
|
Post by longislanditalian2 on Oct 3, 2009 7:13:26 GMT -5
@lillyand Scotty- Please give credit, I did give you those idea's the the first paragraph...
|
|
|
|
Post by lillyscotty on Oct 3, 2009 7:16:17 GMT -5
She gave credit in the first paragraph, it indicated that you helped her with everything! Great Chapter, yay they kissed!!
|
|
|
|
Post by lillyandscotty on Oct 3, 2009 7:16:38 GMT -5
sorry, meant to. had to get dog from vet, so I was in a hurry.
Longislanditalian2, Thanks fir the idea
|
|
|
|
Post by longislanditalian2 on Oct 3, 2009 7:17:26 GMT -5
Sorry about that, but keep going, this story is great
|
|
|
|
Post by lillyandscotty on Oct 7, 2009 19:49:08 GMT -5
Thanks for the help, LII2
The night before the fighting was finally resolved , the talked it over all night, which sparked them saying things like; "why didn't you pick up cat food"or"You botched that interrogation"
It was now getting pretty bad, but Scotty had an idea;Lilly's birthday was next week. The one that both him and Lilly would celebrate to make it special on her birthday.
Finally when the day had finally came, and luckily, they had no cases;They left at 7pm to go home. Of course Scotty being Scotty, told Lilly to dress nicely. After a while, Lilly put on a red dress and was surprised to see Scotty in a tux.
They then had started walking, it was lucky that tonight was such a beautiful, clear night. Before long, the two had stopped at the restaurant Lilly had always wanted to eat at.
After having dinner, which consisted of chicken and mashed potatoes for both and some delicious dessert, a slice of chocolate cake that Lilly suggested they share, They went for a walk in a park.
Scotty then hailed on of those park guides with the horses which had no name; as the two then got in. About half hour later, they still had some more of the tour left, so Lilly put her head on Scotty's shoulder.
she looked up a bit, and started to kiss him; he put his head down and kissed her back. Later on back at her apartment, the two then fell asleep together.
|
|
|
|
Post by lillyandscotty on Oct 10, 2009 16:38:08 GMT -5
For once, the squad room was quiet and peaceful with no fights for about three days;Until Scotty's cousin in Florida asked him to come work with a case. Due that it was about five in the morning that day, and everyone was half asleep, the peace and quiet was calming. suddenly yelling could be heard down the hall, Vera groaned,Jefferies put his head on his desk, Kat cringed and Stillman went in his office.
"Florida? Florida!" Lilly yelled
"not that long." Scotty yelled back
"How long do you think, you'll be there?" Lilly said
When Scotty didn't answer, Lilly tried again "How, long?"
"Oh no" Nick mumbled
"hopefully, three weeks" he said
"Hopefully three weeks?" Lilly yelled
"ugh" Kat mumbled
"Why didn't you say no? huh? why?"
"He really needed help" Scotty yelled
Locking himself in his office didn't help;Stillman could still hear them.he could see everyone else, annoyed and bothered. after about two minutes of fighting, he had enough. he walked out, and slammed the door shut;when that didn't do anything, he slammed his fist hard down onto a desk, making everybody jump. Lilly and Scotty stopped fighting, but their apologetic smiles wouldn't spare them. Stillman thrusted his thumb towards his office.
"get in, and sit down."
next part of this chapter will be up in about a half hour
|
|
|
|
Post by lillyscotty on Oct 10, 2009 21:45:45 GMT -5
Your descpritive writing is brillant, love how Stillman gets so angry.
|
|
