"Frozen" Pt. 4.

[Falling]

Lilly returns to Lucia Markson’s apartment.
Lilly: Hi Lucia, may I come in?
Lucia: You want to talk more about Casey?
Lilly: I have a few questions, is all.
Lucia: Okay…
Lilly: Did you ever hear about 2 teenagers that had ever harassed Casey or Alex?
Lucia: I hear them complaining about them a few times.
Lilly: Ever catch any names?
Lucia: Not really…mostly just insults. You could ask around the building, someone must know.
Lilly: Anyone in particular?
Lucia: Maybe the Juarez’s across de street…6B.
Lilly knocks on the apartment door. One of the teenagers opens the door, flashing to a man in his late 20’s.
Man: Hello?
Lilly: Lilly Rush, homicide. I’m investigating the murder of Casey Markson.
Man: I don’t know anything about that, I don’t think I can help you.
Lilly: Are you sure? I don’t know anyone unaware of a murder that happened 6 floors under them. Don’t get out a lot?
Man: I don’t have to answer these questions.
Lilly: Just 2. What’s your name and what were you doing the night of Casey’s murder? Just hangin’ out?
Man: Vincent Kellench, and I think you should mind your own d**n business.
Vincent closes the door and locks it. Lilly walks off.
Cut to Elsley Asylum.
Lilly: Alex, do you remember a Vincent Kellench? Maybe you 2 shared words?
Alex: I don’t know who that is. I told you…I don’t remember much…just that me and Casey went out that night…
Lilly: Alex…you came to me. You told me what you knew. I assumed you wanted this case solved, and now I’m having my doubts. You have to help me if we’re going to find Casey’s killer.
Alex: Killers.
Lilly: Excuse me?
Alex: Killers. She was killed by 2 teenagers. If you give me a little bit…I could maybe remember some more of that night. Just please give me some time.
Lilly: I’ve already angry one suspect. Who’s to say how much time we have.
Alex sighs, and lies down on his asylum bed.
Alex: Just a day, please. To think.
Lilly: One day.

[CC Fan]

ah! its awsome! I just want to give one small suggestion. I think its' good that you break it up into small sections, but the sections are just a little too small, its just that I'll read it, and come back two days later, and it's hard to remember what I read the other day. Maybe, you could combine two sections together, that way it's not confusing, and easy to understand, but again, it's your story and it's awsome! so as long as you keep writing, im fine. ;D

[Falling]

I understand completely, and to be honest, I think I'm going to take a brief pause in writing...I have to make some revisions, I hope you understand. I'll see if I can make it better, and I need some time. I already had parts 1, 2, and 3 written when I started submitting, then I felt pressure. Just need a little while to work on it some more.

[CC Fan]

sure, it's no problem at all ;D! Whenever you finish, it's totally fine. And don't worry about feeling pressure, there aren't a lot of people on these boards yet, but we seem to get more people each day, so it's good to give them time to catch up.