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Post by longislanditalian2 on Jul 25, 2009 12:10:34 GMT -5
Where exactly do these flashbacks take place, I'm just wondering what part of Philly and what year. good job, no grammatical errors or anything..
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Post by noazmale on Jul 25, 2009 12:57:04 GMT -5
Where exactly do these flashbacks take place, I'm just wondering what part of Philly and what year. good job, no grammatical errors or anything.. Actually it takes place at the nursery that Mendelson owned. The one his daughter disappeared from. I'm not familiar with Philadelphia enough to know exactly where to place it so that's why I've never mentioned a road or area. But as stated at the beginning of the story, the daughter disappeared from the nursery. That's where this flashback takes place. |
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Post by longislanditalian2 on Jul 25, 2009 12:58:35 GMT -5
Just watch some CC episodes, that's what I do to become Familiar. Use familiar places mentioned in the show, I do.
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Post by noazmale on Jul 25, 2009 16:43:40 GMT -5
SEVEN
“I never harmed her,” Holcomb finished. “And I would have made sure she got a good home. I just figured if she was out of the way then Ted wouldn’t have any reason not to leave his wife. That’s all there was to it. But she died before I could even get back into town.”
“You expect us to believe that she died from eating apricots?” Lilly asked.
“No, not the apricots,” said Holcomb. “The pits. She would break them open and eat the insides. And as I told her, that can be dangerous. Apricot pits have cyanide inside them. Eat enough of them and they can make you sick. Or worse.”
Nick slid a pad and pen across the table to Holcomb.
“Write it down,” he said. “Exactly as you told it to us. If you’re lucky the DA may decide not to go for the death penalty. If you’re lucky all you’ll get is life in prison.”
“But I didn’t hurt her,” Holcomb protested. “She died from eating apricot pits, just as I told you. If anything it was an accidental death. That’s all.”
“Well, we’ll check out your story,” said Lilly. “But you kidnapped her. She died during the commission of a felony. That makes it a capital crime. First degree murder. And that makes you eligible for the death penalty.”
“But I never intended to harm her,” protested Holcomb.
“You never intended to harm her?” Lilly questioned anger in her voice. “You were going to take her away from a loving family and sell her to total strangers. Strangers who you didn’t have any idea of how they’d treat her. I can’t think of anything more despicable than that. Now, write out your statement. By the time you’re finished the DA should be here. He can decide what to do with you now.”
Holcomb picked up the pen and just looked at the pad for a few moments before she began to write. Lilly and Nick left the interrogation room and met Stillman and Will just coming out of the observation room.
“Good work,” said Stillman. “I guess this proves that Mendelson didn’t murder his daughter. If what she says is true the girl wasn’t murdered. It was an accidental death.”
“A death during the commission of a felony, just as I told her,” said Lilly, anger still in her voice. “That makes it first degree murder.”
“Oh, I’m not arguing with you,” said Stillman. “Once we have her confession get it typed up so she can sign it. We’ll need to get this to Mendelson’s attorney so he can present it to the appeals court. There shouldn’t be any problem getting his conviction overturned.”
“I’ll get it done as soon as possible,” said Nick. “Plus we have her for the murder of her husband. She’ll probably never get out of prison.”
“Lil,” said Will, “when did you get a court order to exhume her husband’s body?”
“I didn’t,” said Lilly. “I only told her that. I wasn’t sure we had enough to get an exhumation order. But she didn’t know that. She just took my word that the piece of paper I showed her was the exhumation order. It’s a good thing she didn’t look at it.”
“What was it?” Stillman asked.
“Just a blank sheet of paper that I had folded up,” said Lilly. “But it did the trick. When we’re finished up here I’m going to go see Terrance and his mom. Let them know what’s happened. I’m sure they’ll be happy to know we were able to clear Theodore’s name.”
“Speaking of which,” said Stillman, “I’d better give Hank Cain a call. I promised to let him know how things turned out.”
* * *
“So that’s it?” Terrance questioned when Lilly and Nick had told them of the turn of events. “You got a full confession?”
“Enough of one,” said Lilly. “Enough to prove that your father didn’t kill your sister.”
“I knew she loved apricots,” said Charlotte. “I never imagined she’d be eating the pits.”
“I guess no one did,” said Nick. “We checked and found out that Mrs. Holcomb was right. There is cyanide in an apricot pit. And if you eat enough of them they can definitely have an effect on you. Plus our coroner says that with Cari’s medical condition it’s also very possible she had a reaction to the cyanide in the apricot pit. Depending on how many she had eaten.”
“That backpack of hers,” said Terrance. “It had several pockets in the side and the back. I know she usually kept one of them filled with apricots. Maybe a couple of dozen. And she took the backpack wherever she went, when she did go out.”
“According to the police report,” said Lilly, “there were no apricots or apricot pits found on her body when she was found in the culvert. The coroner said with her medical condition it wouldn’t have taken that many for her to have a reaction. If she had been closer to a hospital they might have been able to save her. But where she had the attack there was just nothing anyone could have done about it. She would have been gone in minutes. But she probably didn’t suffer much. You can be thankful for that.”
“What about Mrs. Holcomb?” Charlotte asked. “What will they do with her?”
“We have a signed confession from her about the murder of your daughter and her husband,” said Nick. “Considering the circumstances the DA probably won’t go for the death penalty. But more than likely she’ll spend the rest of her life in prison.”
“What about my dad?” Terrance asked. “You said this proves he didn’t murder Cari. Doesn’t that mean they have to let him out of prison?”
“That will be up to the courts,” said Lilly. “But I imagine that once they learn what happened they’ll vacate his conviction. There’s some red tape to go through but I imagine his lawyer will have him out of prison just as soon as possible.”
“Thank you,” said Terrance. “Thank you for everything. I always knew my dad was innocent. But to be honest I wasn’t sure anyone would ever be able to prove it.”
“Yes, thank you, detectives,” said Charlotte. “Thank you for coming by to tell us. Now if you’ll excuse me, I do have things to do.”
Charlotte turned and headed back into the living room. Terrance just watched his mother walk away with a pained look on his face. Then he turned back to the detectives.
“I’m sorry,” he said. “I’m afraid this doesn’t help her much. I don’t think she’ll ever get over Cari’s death. I don’t really know what to do for her.”
“We can give you some numbers,” said Lilly. “Agencies that might be able to help.”
“Thanks,” said Terrance. “I’m not sure what good it will do. She doesn’t want to do much of anything but sit and watch the old home movies of my sister.”
“If you change your mind, let me know,” said Lilly. “I can put you in touch with those agencies I mentioned.”
“Thank you again,” said Terrance. “I’ll be sure to let dad know you were responsible for getting him free. Once he’s back home.”
“Just doing our job,” said Lilly. “We were glad to help.”
“You think she’ll get better?” Nick asked as he and Lilly walked to the car.
“I don’t know,” said Lilly. “There are some things that some people never get over. All we can do it try to help. Sometimes it works sometimes it doesn’t. We can’t save everyone.”
“Well, at least we were able to get an innocent man out of prison,” said Nick.
“And solved another murder to boot,” said Lilly. “Not a bad day’s work.”
“I’ll drive,” said Nick, getting in behind the wheel. “And when we get back to the office I’ll buy you a cup of coffee.”
“The coffee’s free at the office,” said Lilly, smiling at her partner.
“Don’t mention that to the boss,” said Nick. “He might decide to make us pay for it what with the budget cuts and all.”
Lilly just laughed as Nick headed back to the police station.
The End
If you’ve enjoyed this story, you can find more “Cold Case” stories at my website, Creative Passions, listed in my bio. You can also post your own “Cold Case” stories or other stories if you like to write fan fiction.
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Post by longislanditalian2 on Jul 25, 2009 17:18:08 GMT -5
Very good ending, nice start for your first fic here. It wasn't bad at all...
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