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Post by Shorty on May 29, 2005 1:16:05 GMT -5
me and my friends do this at school sometimes, it turns out interesting/amusing results and i thought we could try it out here
what happens is this, someone starts off a story then someone else comes and fills in the middle and someone else finishes it off, although, if it seems to short, more than one person can write in the middle, give it a go!
PART ONE
a group of 10 year old boys are playing cricket in a school yard, a blond boy with dark brown eyes steps up and gets ready to take a swing, one of the boys sitting on the ground at the batters end of the pitch stands up and yells loudly
"COME ON BILLY! YOU CAN DO THIS!!!!" the boy next to him jumps to his feet and shoves him back onto the ground
"shut up, cant you see - he needs to concentrate!"
"sorry, whats your problem!?"
"your distracting our best player when he needs to concentrate!" by now the other boys are watching the two argue with puzzled expressions on their faces
"hey, Davie! whats the matter with you!?" one of them asked. looking around, Davie sees the other boys watching, even the players
"WHAT ARE YOU STARING AT!?" he yells glaring around, tears in his eyes, the other boys look startled, one of them stands up and touches Davie's shoulder
"hey man, whats up?"
"LEAVE ME ALONE!" Davie pushes the hand away before running off, the boys stare after him
scene cuts to Davie falling down toward camera
typewriter- David Moore - Suicide
present day
we follow someone into the police department, up the lift, into homicide (note, we only see his back). Lilly is sitting at her desk working on some paperwork, the person reaches into his pocket, pulls out and envelope and throws it on her desk on top of the work she is doing. Surprised, Lilly looks up but the man is already striding quickly away
"wait!"
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Post by ruda on May 29, 2005 3:59:25 GMT -5
Shorty...
nice beginnig
can you write more, and more about this? ;D
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Post by Disasterfreak on May 29, 2005 18:33:23 GMT -5
This sounds like an awesome idea shorty. Gosh, I really wanna contribute but I don't have time right now. Someone else fill in in the meantime...  |
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Post by ruda on Jun 5, 2005 2:23:08 GMT -5
and... where is continue?
Shorty...
please write here all fic!
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Post by Shorty on Jun 5, 2005 2:28:12 GMT -5
i was waiting for someone else to continue... doesnt anyone want to contribute?  rudaxf? disasterfreak? anyone? |
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Post by ruda on Jun 5, 2005 3:39:12 GMT -5
Shorty...
this is your fic and you know what he must look andwhat mustbe in him so please... write...
I have no idee how can I continue your fic
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Post by Shorty on Jun 5, 2005 3:50:49 GMT -5
Shorty... this is your fic and you know what he must look andwhat mustbe in him so please... write... I have no idee how can I continue your fic actually i have no idea ;D- i make it up as i write, course you can!!! well, if noone is going to contribute... ill write some more tomorrow, anyway, thanks rudaxf, Disasterfreak for answering *hugs* and at any time, if someone has an idea- POST IT!!! |
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Post by Shorty on Jun 5, 2005 20:41:53 GMT -5
PART ONE CONTINUED
the man ignores Lilly and continues strideing away
"Hey wait up!", peturbed, Lilly stands up, in so doing, picking up the letter. she starts to follow him
"oi!" by now he is almost at the lift and so, she starts to jog towards him, the lift doors open and she sprints- she doesnt know what she's going to do when she catches up but she knows that she must stop him- shes sure she recognises him but she cant be sure until she sees his face, but the strides the same...
he steps into the lift and turns around, she stops and stares at him, frightened and shocked,slowly she shakes her head slightly, not taking her eyes off him, he stares back at her, a cruel grin on his face, mockingly he blows her a kiss and presses a button, the doors slide closed, Lilly remains stareing, fear and shock on her face. after a moment she raises her hand and looks at the envelope, we get an over-the-shoulder shot of the enverlope, on the front are the words
SEE YOU SOON
a tear slides down one cheek, quickly she wipes it away and looks descretely around to see if anyone noticed, if they did, they conceal it. taking a deep breath, she turns it over and slides her finger under the flap.
SCENE CUTS TO STILLMAN'S OFFICE
stillman is sitting at his desk filling out a form of some kind, at the door Lilly hesitates, enverlope and two sheets of paper in her hand, she stares at the top sheet for a while, then quickly folds it up and sticks it into her pocket
"Lil!?" she jumps and stares at stillman guiltily
JS-"Lil, are you alright? you look like youve seen a ghost!"
LR-" yes, umm,this just came... in the mail"
she hands him the other sheet along with the enverlope. he takes it, glances back at her with a worried look on his face. she smiles at him to say "im alright" but its easy to see she's anything but. quickly he scans down the sheet before looking back at her concerned and a little puzzled
JS (reading aloud)-"on September, 1989 David Moore's death was ruled a suicide, that is not true- he was pushed- he would never jump, he HATED hights and NOTHING would get him anywhere near the top of that cliff- ask George-they were best friends, at least, until Davie started acting all weird."
"is this all?"
Lilly nodds but stillman isnt convinced, he remains staring at her until she looks down and shakes her head sightly. slowly, she reaches into her pocket and draws out the other sheet, avoiding his gaze, she hands it to him and stands stareing at the floor, biting her lip, tears in her eyes. as he reads, understanding creeps into his expression, understanding and sorrow. he looks back up at her and, in seeing her tears, stands up and goes over to her
JS-"Lilly have you read this?"
LR-"no- ive been to afraid, but i think i know whats in it"
JS-" Lilly, he cant hurt you and he says he doesnt want to"
nodding her head lilly wispers,not looking up
"did he, really?-its a bit late" she smiles grimly at stillman, he stares back sadly, she looks down again
LR-"why did he.... i didnt know him...i was only 10....i gave him the money why wouldnt he go away?" a tear falls to the floor and stillman gently puts his arms around her
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NOW does anyone want to continue *looks around hopefully* btw, thanks to the person who mentioned this idea on the source #1 site
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Post by Disasterfreak on Jun 5, 2005 22:41:48 GMT -5
LOL... that was me. So I guess I should get my butt in gear and pitch in. Sorry for being so lazy, Shorty...
Stillman let her go, not really knowing what to do next. Part of him knew he should dismiss her from the case--this was too personal, too close. She'd lose objectivity. To say nothing of her mental health.
But then again... the man had come to her. To her. Why?
He felt anger soar through him--the same anger he'd felt years ago when his own daughter was abused under his very nose, without his being able to do anything about it. What was wrong with him that he seemed unable to protect those he cared about? Here was this woman, who worked under him, whom he had trained since she was a fledgling, practically--suffering similar indignities, and being forced to help the one responsible!!
But a case was a case. Personal feelings aside, this one had fallen into their laps and they had to solve it--whether they wanted to or not. Now the tricky part was... how much should he tell the others?
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Post by Disasterfreak on Jun 5, 2005 22:56:58 GMT -5
"So what's this all about, boss?" Scotty Valens asked, balancing an eraser on top of a pen as he sat on his desk, listening aimlessly.
Stillman gave him a severe look. "1989. 10-yr-old boy named David Moore was killed falling off a 12th floor balcony. His death was ruled a suicide. The boy had been having some trouble--mood swings, erratic behavior. He was alone when it happened, no one was ever able to find signs of forced entry or anyone in the apartment. He was an only child, his parents were at work. Never saw it coming, apparently."
"So if it's a suicide--why are we looking into it?" Vera asked.
"Lil got a letter this morning. From someone who says he was pushed. Not much to go on, but we've done more with less."
"Where IS Lil, anyway?" Scotty wondered, looking around curiously.
"Gave her the morning off. Family trouble." Stillman's voice came out unexpectedly short and harsh, causing the others to exchange puzzled glances. "Let's focus on the case. Seems the clothes were saved from the scene of the crime--no prints were pulled off but there WAS blood. Back then it was assumed it was David's."
"But now we have DNA..." Jeffries said, catching on.
"Right. So I say we talk to the witnesses again and see if we come up with anything."
"Why would anyone push a 10-yr-old off a balcony?" Vera puzzled, shaking his head. "What enemies can a kid that young possibly have?"
"Guess that's for us to find out."
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Post by Shorty on Jun 5, 2005 23:29:35 GMT -5
YAY!!!!!!!!! thanks disasterfreak- great adition!!!
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Post by ruda on Jun 6, 2005 8:39:05 GMT -5
"I must talk with Lil, boss. The letter was for her so this case is her case." said Scotty.
"Yes, but she have a day off" said Stillman.
Scotty look at him. He saw in boss eyes some fear, pain.
"What happend" ask Valens few seconds later.
He still look at Stillmans eyes.
"Nothing" answered boss.
"Boss... Please tell me. I need to know. If somebody want hurt her..."
"I can't tell you but I can show you something" said Stillman and give gim a little letter "Read"
Dear Lil
I want to see you. I need you like in that night when you was a little girl. I want see your pain and tears again. Your bleedenig face. I want hear your pretty scream...
We'll be together
I promisse...
XXX
"My God..." said softly Scotty and make a deep breathe "How is she? How she feel?"
"Bad. She's shaking so much... I never saw her that scary. Belive me" said Stillman "He can hurt her again"
"This man... He's from her 49?"
"Yes"
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Post by TVFan on Jun 6, 2005 14:58:26 GMT -5
This great guys! It flows so well. Neat idea Shorty
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Post by Disasterfreak on Jun 6, 2005 19:39:02 GMT -5
Aw, Ruda, you are so EVIL--you're gonna make me write L/S shipping even though I don't want to :smile11: :smile55:
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Post by Shorty on Jun 6, 2005 23:27:39 GMT -5
thanks TV fan, its not actually my idea- i stole it off one of my teachers at EBIS- wanna contribue ;D? well theres always another story disasterfreak although, im not against L/S fics- i quite like them because in them Lillys always happy, YAY!!!!! thank you to all who have read and replied please keep going- i want to see how this ends  :smile49: awesome aditions rudaxf and disasterfreak :smile39: btw- i went back and made a few slight changes to my parts- nothing to drastic and it ties in better with your aditions |
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Post by ruda on Jun 7, 2005 13:08:21 GMT -5
Disasterfreak, It's not a shipper. I just write something about Scotty and letter to Lil. Shorty, Thank you very much. I'm glad if you like my story...  |
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Post by Shorty on Jun 17, 2005 16:29:16 GMT -5
noone seems to be updating anything on this part of the site but then, mabey your all busy writing ;D or working.... anyway continued from where rudaxf left off... Scotty looked back down at the sheet of paper in his hands... how can something so small cause so much pain? he thought sadly, then anger flared inside him- how DARE someone do this to Lilly!HOW could they? then the something else made his anger dissolve- fear "where is she?" he demanded. Stillman looked at him and saw fear and anger inside his eyes "at home" he answered. Scotty nodded and tried to hand the peice of paper back. When Stillman didnt take it, he threw it onto his desk and walked out, grabbing his coat on the way .... Lilly sat on her couch, curled into a tight, protective ball, shivering. her eyes were red from crying and she had a headache. When Stillman had said "he cant hurt you and he says he doesnt want to you" She knew he was lying and that he had said exactly the opposite- that he could hurt her and was going to. now she was terrified, but she sure as heak wasnt going to show it to anyone but her cats, and not even them if she could help it! with these thoughts, she slowly forced her body to uncurl, before making her way to the bathroom where she splashed her face with water and toweled it dry. that done, she headed back out towards her kitchen, intending to make herself a cup of coffee before going back to work- they had a new lead on a case and she needed to talk it over with Scotty if they were to solve it. she felt the familiar buzz of strength retern and her fear became a shameful memory- if this guy tried anything, she could handle it!-she was a fullgrown adult now, not a 10 year old! a knock on the door nearly caused her to drop the coffee pot. Furious with herself for letting her fear get hold again, she replaced the coffee pot back on the bench before going to answer whoever it was that was going to break down the door if she didnt open it sharpish. With each step that she took however, she felt the fear increase and no amount of positive thoughts or scolding caused it to diminish. After an eternity, she found herself within reach of the door, her heart hammered and she watched in terror as her hand moved of its own accord towards the latch. i will not cry i will not cry i will not cry, she chanted that in her head, i will not cry i will not cry i will not cry i will not cry i will not cry i will not cry, the latch turned and the door swung slowly open, i will not cry i will not cry i will not cry i will not cry, Scotty stood on her door step, two hands raise, ready to continue destroying her door. normaly, she would have pretended to assess the damage done to her door and joke anout billing him for it, normaly she wouldnt have taken forever to open the door, instead she burst into tears again, she couldnt believe herself! .................................................................................... |
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Post by ruda on Jun 18, 2005 12:08:34 GMT -5
short but... next:
She open the door. Scotty look at her and take a deep breathe.
"We need to talk" he said and he get into her apartament and close the door.
"Talk?" she ask. In her voice was a big fear. She was shaking "About what?".
"About your past. I know what was happend whan you was 10. Stillman told me. I'm sorry Lil but..."
"But what?! You want help me?! You cant! You can only watched! You can only watch..." now she realy cry.
She go to the kitchen and sit on the cheir- face in her hands and cry. Scotty go to her side and put her hands down. He want look into her eyes.
"I'll help you Lil. I promisse" he said.
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Post by Shorty on Jun 21, 2005 15:08:07 GMT -5
quality, not quantity |
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Post by ruda on Jun 21, 2005 15:39:48 GMT -5
quality, not quantity eeeee... where? In my chapter? I can't see... |
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